Sunday, May 15, 2011

CBWR? Chapter 86

Author’s notes:
What a bunch of whiners you are!  LOL  j/k
Sorry – I know I left you in a horrible spot.  Yes, I am a sadist.  I couldn’t let you wait too long though, so here’s the next one.  It’s not a lengthy chapter, but it will at least leave you in a slightly better place.
Slightly.
I didn’t get the chance.
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Chapter 86
The back of my neck was burning, but all that went through my head was Bella.
She’s not safe…not safe…not safe…
I was such a fucking idiot.  I had let everything I had been feeling for her – with her – take over all my logical thought, and had all but forgotten our actual predicament.  I had forgotten the most important thing, which was keeping her safe.  My arms went around her, and I flung her down to the ground, covering her with my body as much as I could. 
“Edward!”
“Shut up!” I hissed.  “Stay down!  Don’t fucking move!”
She whimpered, but did as I said.  Whoever was shooting wasn’t a great shot, or I’d be dead.  I reached up to the back of my neck, which really fucking hurt, but seemed to only be a graze.  My hand came back with blood on my fingers, but I wasn’t gushing anywhere - definitely just grazed.  I looked over to the little table next to the bed, where my gun was sitting.
Fuck.
I had to get to it, but I couldn’t leave her.
My mind spun around as I tried to think – as I tried to react – but all I could do was think about what an idiot I was for not remembering the person who had tried to follow us from Germany, as well as whoever else might be after either me or her.  Now Bella could be hurt again, and there was no fucking way I could let that happen.  I took a deep breath, and started to raise myself up.  Maybe I could haul her across the floor with me; still keeping her covered while I went for the gun.
I didn’t get the chance.
The door broke open, and splinters of wood flew in every direction.  Again, I pulled Bella close.  I had fucked this up so bad, but there was no way I was going to let anyone take her away and make her do anything she didn’t want to do.  They’d have to fucking kill me first.
Unfortunately, that probably wasn’t going to be very difficult.
The next words I heard both thrilled and condemned me.
“Release your hostage and get your hands where we can see them!”
Cops.
Fucking cops.
They wouldn’t hurt her.
Bella’s hands gripped my arms tightly, and I turned my head to look down into her panicked eyes.   I raised my hand off the floor long enough to brush the edge of her cheek with my thumb.
“Release her, now!”
“They won’t hurt you,” I whispered to her.  “You’ll be okay…but you have to find Rosalie.  You have to get that chip deactivated.  You hear me?”
“No…no, Edward!  I’ll explain…they won’t…they won’t…”
I shook my head as I heard the footsteps of several people walking farther into the room and closer to where my body covered hers on the floor.  I still didn’t make a move to look at them.  I did notice a decent sized pile of rose petals under the corner of the bed, where the hotel staff had obviously missed them. 
Bella made a strange, muffled sound in her throat.
“Shh…it’s okay,” I told her, stroking her cheek one more time.  I wanted to tell her more, and part of me begged to say the words I wanted to say to her, but I didn’t.
“I won’t let them take you!” Bella said with fervor.
“You can’t stop them,” I replied.
“Like hell I can’t!” she snapped, and then she looked up over my shoulder with heat in her eyes.  A heat the dimmed quickly, her eyes widening first in shock, and then elation.
The next word after that blasted through my torso and had the potential to have left me bleeding out as much as any bullet could have.
“Daddy!”
I moved to one side as she scrambled out from under me.  I heard shouting, but didn’t completely make out the words, though my subconscious must have taken over to some degree, because I placed my hands on top of my head when they told me to.  My fingers were still wet from being inside of her, they were covered in her scent.  I closed my eyes and inhaled deeply right before I felt my arms being wrenched behind me, one after the other, and I heard the distinctive click of handcuffs.
Someone up there hates me, right?
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Chapter end notes:
Ah Doofy…poor guy…please note story title and insert [here].
More tomorrow. 

101 comments:

  1. Whoa! That's all I got.

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  2.  Holy MOTHER!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Charlie??? her telling him she won't let them take him? *sniffle* I'm just... that was just....

    OMG

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  3. OMG She called her dad didn't she? 

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  4.  Holy hell! You are officially the queen of cliffies 

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  5. If whining works...

    Funny how cops are bad shots. I wonder how Charlie found her? 

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  6. Thanks for posting tonight. What the hell is Bella going to tell Daddy to try and get Edward out of this.

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  7. Um... speachless. A little bit scared and a little bit sad. Sigh 

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  8. Wow. She is an idiot for calling her dad. I mean he's a cop! Obviously that would have happened.

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  9. DADDY!!!  Hmmmm....THEY shot him?  Or someone else?  I wouldn't think DADDY would shoot anywhere near Bella...

    Hmmmm....more twists and turns!

    And, HEY, I'm not whiny!!! That's Adonica....lololol 

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  10. you rock my socks off for posting tonight!

    Good chapter! I agree... It could be worse.
    ~@shelgibson

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  11. FUCK YOU COPDADDY AND THE COP HORSE THAT YOU SWAM TO FRANCE ON!!!!

    And, thanks, Savage for the chapter. 

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  12. THANK YOU BB.... Yes.. angsty but in a MUCH BETTER PLACE!!!  *mwah* @MoniNP 

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  13. ooooh no it COULDN´T be worse!

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  14. How ironic...Daddy?  OMG you are something....Just can't get enought of this story...it could be worse though, I don't know how much worse, but it could be worse....lol
    Thanks 

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  15. Slightly is right! Lol

    Poor Doofy :-(

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  16. I clicked on the site so I could read what everyone else was whining about and found another chapter.  THIS IS SUPPOSED TO MAKE ME FEEL SLIGHTLY BETTER?  Ok, so at least you didn't kill him off...yet.  There is still some hope.  She can tell Charlie that Edward wasn't the kidnapper, that he was trying to help her escape.  She can, right?

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  17. Yes it could be worse.  At least he is not bleeding out.  But was that the cops that shot through the window?  Kind of risky I would think, especially since they were not that good a shot.  They could have hit Bella.  Bella was all prepared to defend Edward against the cops and not let them take him.  All she would have had to do was deny that she was a hostage and he was her husband.  But now that it is not just cops, but Daddy, now what?  I know a lot of people suspected that Charlie had found them, but I was still surprised at that.  That would  actually be great if they had not fallen in love.  Thanks for the update!!! 

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  18. I was offline for two days now I got 4 chapters!!!!! 
    it was for the best. they won't kill him or take her. they'll listen to her of course.
    but if that guy in germany was a cop daddy must be royally pissed....
    kikabr

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  19. thankyou!!!!thanksyou!!!!thankyou!!!!thanksyou!!!!


    even though things are bad as hell, i feel so much better.
    Edward is not inured and Bella is not in danger.


    and yeah, i knew Lee  was some kind of detective tracking her down.

    once again, thanks for giving us chapter 86.
    :)

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  20. should have answered his phone, wonder if b will be able to help him avoid charges

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  21. A much better place??? WTF??? I think I liked the cliffie with the gunshot better. I could still have hope they would get away. This chapter officially split them apart! Oh my... I won't be home Tuesday night so you HAVE to update and get us out of this horrible angsty place tomorrow!

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  22. oh my.... yeah a slightly better place my ass.... if you had only answered your damn phone you ass!!!!!!  way to meet the dad ed!!  i am not sure you can get out of this ed... savage the queen of evil is sailing you the river!!!! 

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  23. It was Alice... wasn't it???  She hit exactly what she was aiming for.  Just enough to seriously get his attention so that Cop Daddy and Cop Buddies wouldn't bust in to find him fucking Bella.  That would have made it soooo much worse.  Methinks Charlie may have killed ol' Doofus on the spot if he'd caught them in the marriage bed! 

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  24. HOLY SHIT! is the next scene Daddy kicking the shit out of a hand cuffed Doofy??? just a regular guy... pussy got him caught up! lol. Could be worse, right? 

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  25.  Sigh of relief. So he is not physically hurt too bad. At least until Charlie gets to him. But I think Bella will have the power to show her father what he has done. The good parts he has done. Charlie is still gonna have a cow that his 18 yr old daughter is married to him. 

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  26.  you are killing me! I'm happy that she's reunited with her Dad, but what the heck is gonna happen to him and Bella? *sadface* ;)

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  27. Thank you for not leaving us hanging!  Wow I saw some people guessing it was Charlie and I was wondering myself.  I can't wait to see what Bella does to help Edward.

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  28. Hitchy *crazy for THG*May 15, 2011 at 6:20 PM

    Ah, Savage, thank you!  I'm so glad you updated tonight!  I wonder what dear old daddy is going to think when he hears Bella profess her love for the criminal he found fucking her with his fingers?  Hmmm?

    Oh, Doofy.  She won't leave you like the rest of them.  You'll see. 

    We'll just have to go through a shit load of angst and uncertainty to get them back together, right?

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  29.  OH NO!  I really hope that they can work through this!

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  30. Cockblocked by the copstache!
    Surprised he didn't shoot Edward in the ass for what he was doing to his daughter.
    Doof. You don't have the good luck son....

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  31.  Oh thank you thank you thank you. I can't believe daddy showed up. Goodness whats gonna happen next . 

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  32. Well thanks for not leaving me hanging long with that last cliff hanger. Now you give me this one? Which is better I must say (but not by much). And I think someone up there must definitely hate him. I *think* I can survive until tomorrow.

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  33. Oh poor boy - doofus falls for her then daddy shows up! SUCKS ASS! 

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  34. Please not too angst. I can't take it.

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  35. dang. on edge of my seat. popcorn. 

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  36. Oh my, not exactly the position you want to be in to meet Daddy...especially Daddy With a Gun 

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  37.  Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh FCUK!!!!!!!!!!! Charlieeeee?!?!?!?! This cant b gud!!!!! Eddie, the guys up there definitely hate u!!!!!!! Daymeeeeeeeeeeee, dis iz nt gud, dis iz nt gud at all!!!!!!!! Wonda wat is there that Bella cud do cuz a father's rage cannot be suppressed quite that easily, especially in a situation such as this.....Arrrrrrrgggggggh, idk wat 2 tink, wat 2 do!!!! I shudder at the thought of waitin til 2moro..............SUX AZZ MAYNEEEE.

    But hey, on da bright side, Eddie was only grazed!!!!!! YAYYYYYY an bella's ok, YAY!!!!! But is Eddie goin 2 b ok!!!!!! Oh CRAP, thnx sooo much 4 dis chapt. It eased 10% of ma worries!!!!!!!! At least that's progress right?!?! SHITTTTTTT

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  38.  HOOLLLYYYYYYYYYYYY CRAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAPPPPP! 

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  39. Bella recognized that no one was ever there for him, that they all left him . . . so she won't! 

    She may be 18, but she's about to show us all a thing or two!

    She will see to it that his neck is tended to and he is released - but NOT at the cost of never seeing him again, NO!

    Wives can't testify against their husbands!

    Besides, cops wouldn't have shot through the glass at him - and she is still in danger!

    Rally the troops - Alice!!!!!

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  40. yes... i can be whiney..... i admit.... now iam not sure what is worse... being shot or  daddy showing up and being arrested...  being seperated from her... one cliffie to another...

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  41. I kinda wondered if, while Bella was in the spa, she 'borrowed' one of the spa workers phones and called home with it. Maybe that would explain why Charlie was there to find her. And, no, I don't think the cops shot at Edward - whoever said 'Alice", I agree with them.
    Still a cliffie, but now we know he's not seriously and deathly injured. Hopefully Bella WILL speak up for him. After all, he IS her husband.
    Thanx for updating again! You are the best! 

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  42. Thanks Savage for posting. Someone last chapter nailed it. She called Charlie from the spa and he traced the call? Arggggg!

    Maybe she can tell them that Aro had her the whole time and then she went willingly with Edward.

    It all depends on if Lee was a cop or not because he treated her like a slave in front of Lee. I guess a bad guy was shooting him through the window? I like Alice theory though. She was trying to get his attention before the cops got in?

    Again. Sadness. Thanks Savage for giving in to the shameless begging.

    Roshambo

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  43.  I get the feeling you are warning us of a rotten ending to this story.  I hope not.  If this story is about Edward starting to learn to love, only to be abandoned again, that would kind of suck.  Not much learning or redemption in that.

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  44.  Poor Doofy !  I really hope that Bella will fight for him !  Just so he knows that someone really care !  Can't wait to read you again... I'm so addicted to this story !  Your awesome:)

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  45.  Whiney, uuh? you are evil!! Anyway... Thank you for this chapter! 

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  46.  Ooooooooo, I didn't think about it being a "warning shot" from Alice.  You're good!

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  47.  How are they going to explain this to Charlie? Poor Edward!!!!! 

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  48.  I can't wait for her to say to Daddy that he isn't holding her captive but he is her husband lmao!

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  49.  Definitely thinking that he should've answered his phone earlier. Poor Doofus just can't buy a break, can he?

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  50. Never thought it would be Charley! Don't believe it was him that shot at him either since he was so close to Bella and wouldn't take the chance of hitting her by mistake. Question now is, who did the shooting? Tune in tomorrow to see what happens to our sweet Doofus. Yeah, I said sweet. What can I say...I love the guy. LOL. Shay, you rock!!

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  51. At least it really is the good guys, not bad guys posing as good guys. Yeah, could be worse. ;)

    But Charlie as a character doesn't have a very good track record in listening to Bella and believing her when she says Edward can be trusted. And Charlie *is* a cop, after all.

    Sigh... :(

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  52.  damn I had a feeling daddy was coming! oh boy...still chanting * it will be ok* right?

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  53. knew it was daddy.  omg.  now what????? you are sooooooo mean!   

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  54. I thought that I could never hate Charlie more. You proved me wrong. He has never been known to listen to Bella, ever! and I don't think this Charlie will be different.

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  55. Ohhhhhhh dear.  Yes, I think someone up there must hate him.

    I just want to note that among the many mistakes he's made over the course of this story, two come to mind right now:  1) having Bella pretend to be a slave when Lee came calling, and 2) holding her hands above her head just now, to make it look (to an outsider) like he's forcing her.  These two things are NOT gong to help whatever case he and Bella try to make here.  Not that he had much chance anyway. 

    Maybe the biggest mistake of all (besides not answering the phone, which we've all berated him for already) was to stay in Paris so long.  They should have kept moving...and been less conspicuous. 

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  56. Well, considering the alternatives, either Aro's people, or a pissed-off Alice, I guess it could be worse!  I hope he doesn't do anything stupid.  I hope she tells her Dad that she loves him, and is married to him!   It could happen, right? 

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  57.  Hahahahaha Knew it was Charlie.  

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  58. @Afbisfab: that is a great thought! 

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  59. Daddy? holy crap Charlie gets out of Forks? wow 

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  60.  Oh hell! The NotSoDeadCharlie made an appearance after all :( If he was the one looking into whatever the devise with cross hair was, he might very well want to kill Doofy on the spot. I hope Bella comes up with a story that would place Edward as a good guy. Although honestly, I don't know what she can say to save his ass right now... after all :( If he was the one looking into whatever the devise with cross hair was, he might very well want to kill Doofy on the spot. I hope Bella comes up with a story that would place Edward as a good guy. Although honestly, I don't know what she can say to save his ass right now...

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  61. I figured that Charlie would try to 'Save the Day'.
    Oh to be Doofy's hostage...*le sigh*

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  62. OMG! OMG! NOOOOOOOO!

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  63. I was thinking she should try to grab the cell phone for finding Rose.  Love that you threw a nice little twist at us right there! lol  Guess Charlie has better connections than we thought, eh?  ;D  Thanking my lucky starts I just saw that there's one more tantalizing chappy sitting there waiting for me! Whoo hoo! Have a feeling Bella's cursing cock-blocking Mr. Murphy and his Laws right about now along with the rest of us horny women! LOL Hmmm, wonder if Charlie is envisioning roast chestnuts (or are they Ednuts?), lambasted, sauteed or fricassee?  Probably a sequence - draws out the... enjoyment.  lol

    Thanks!!!

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  64. Well Charlie finding Bella was one of the four options I thought would happen. Now Bella is safe I think more so than if it were bad guys who came busting in but the chip and I hope she knows he loves her. 

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  65. Yes, it could, but it could also be better. I was thinking it was odd that French police would be speaking in English. When Bella turned and shouted it made some sense, just a little though.
    And thankfully he isn't badly injured.

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  66. Dear Copdaddy Swan,
    I hate you, you cockblocking son of a bitch.
    Doofy better be okay or else...
    And Doofy loves her, let them be.
    Love,
    Me

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  67.  Well, I thought she was going to break out "Badass Bella" and start yelling for them to get away from her husband, but Charlie had to show up. Thanks, Charlie. 

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  68. Yay! Edwards not dead. Why did Charlie have to ruin the date. How did he find them. I was ready for Bella to defend Edward too, but then she said, daddy and it could be worse.

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  69. Loved how feisty she is: Like hell she can't ;-)

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  70. I know the story was labeled angst but that doesn't mean there can't be a HEA!

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  71. shit shit shit shittttt
    he's gonna run right ? 

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  72. wow  charlie!!! oh fuck edwards life! wtf is gonna happen now!! the shit has definitely well and truly hit the fan!! poor edward he would do anything to protect bella!

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  73. Daddy? oh no! Doofus is so screwed! I assume they hVe very little clothes on at this point! That's not going to help matters at all! LOL! I guess it could be worse! Could have been the mob!

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  74. ooohhh dear!!!!! why..oh my...you are making me die writer! off to read chptr 87!yess

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  75. Knew Charlie has something to do with this. Guess being married won' be enough though.  

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  76. Yes, but will he even care. That doesn't explain why she never called them to say she was fine.  

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  77. I admire this scene and I am glad that you gave it its own chapter - it is such a strong moment with Bella's terror for Edward, his terror that he didn't keep her safe, the pain that they won't be together. "Daddy" - that word had the potential to have left him bleeding out - he feels he is losing her for good, she is with her family now, she wouldn't need him anymore and he would never be accepted in her life. It is a culmination of feelings, and I am sorry that you had to write it under so much pressure to hurry, it is still more amazing because of that.

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  78. Oh hell! How in the world did her dad know to find her there of all places??? Something sounds fishy! 

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  79.  lmao  "Cockblocked by the COPSTACHE"!!!  :D

    And yeah, he reeeally doesn't have the good luck...! 

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  80. Awww so I missed this chapter last night!  Poor Edward but man he's in for it with Charlie around :) 

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  81. well at least he didn't die! 

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  82. What? Daddy? You are killing me here!!!
    Ok I got read the next three chapters, thank you so much for not leaving us hanging, you are the best...14 days left of school but who is counting right..... 

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  83. OK, I'm in shock now....how did Charlie find her? Don't tell me it was the
    chip...but he didn’t know about it…


    When will Doofus learn to say what he means to, before it's too late?
     

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  84.  Wow. Charlie found here? What on Earth? What is going to happen now?! This killing me Savage! All this happening! ~Jessi

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  85. Well, I didn't see this coming. 

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  86. Daddy? Not good, not good at all. >.<

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  87. I fucking knew it was Charlie!! I told ya...I told ya...or ahem.. something a little less childish!! I knew he would find her, I so love Charlie!!  She'll fix it right??

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  88. Bella must have called home when she was at the spa. So much for integrationg into her life back home. Now what?

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  89. Wow, did she call home??  Did Charlie just finally find her??  Great twist!!

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  90. I just had a feeling it was Charlie!

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  91. Yes heart fail...ughh. And as a parent I would do the same thing.

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  92. Daddy? oh no! Doofus is so screwed! I assume they hVe very little clothes on at this point! That's not going to help matters at all! LOL! I guess it could be worse! Could have been the mob!

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  93. A much better place??? WTF??? I think I liked the cliffie with the gunshot better. I could still have hope they would get away. This chapter officially split them apart! Oh my... I won't be home Tuesday night so you HAVE to update and get us out of this horrible angsty place tomorrow!

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  94. you rock my socks off for posting tonight!

    Good chapter! I agree... It could be worse.
    ~@shelgibson

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