Friday, April 22, 2011

CBWR? Chapter 50

Author's notes:
 Just a short update - sorry about that. I hope to have one more tonight.

“No loose ends,” I said quietly.

Chapter 50
I could feel my heart pounding as I started to lean forward, ready to step in, make my kills, and get out.  I welcomed the adrenaline rush as it poured through my veins. 
“Do we need to be concerned?” the deep voice I did not recognize said.  “What are they saying in Italy?”
“I haven’t heard back from them yet,” Eric told him.
“Is that a concern?”
“I was expecting to hear from them about ten minutes ago,” Eric replied.  “I’m not concerned yet.”
“Should we be?”
“Yes,” I said as I stepped through the doorway.
The gun fired, and a bright red spot formed in the center of a large, burly man’s chest.  His name was Stephen Roma, and he led the operation here.  At least, he used to lead it.  He dropped face first onto the small round table where they all sat.  To his right was his brother – Vlad.  Another one I had never met before, but knew from his pictures.  I shot him in the head before his sibling hit the table.
Eric began to stand up, his hands going up in the air.
“Cullen!” he cried out.  “What the hell?”
“No loose ends,” I said quietly.
The first shot threw him backwards and against the wall.  I took a step forward and aimed between his eyes.  He looked to his left at his dead comrades before looking back to me.
“I don’t have any allegiance…”
I ended him before he could finish.
I stood there for a moment, considering the best course at this time.  Having a cleaning crew come out and dispose of them didn’t even seem worth the effort at this point, but it would be better than just leaving them to be found later.  The guy at the door – the one who took my cash – he would have no reason to come back here for some time.  It would be best to get out now, grab Bella, and get out of the country.
I holstered the gun under my jacket and walked out, passing the doorman with a slight nod in his direction.  He had obviously heard nothing.  I walked quickly around the counter to the booth where I had left Bella.
She wasn’t there.
This was bad, right?
Chapter end notes:
Well, it ain't good, that's for sure!
Sorry for second evil cliffie in a row.  I do plan to post another chapter tonight, so just hang on for a bit!!


81 comments:

  1. Um, yeah, Edward. I think this is bad. Really bad. REally, really bad. Unless she just went to the bathroom. But she doesn't seem like the foolish kind of girl. Question is, did she run, or was she taken?

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  2. Good God! Yes, that was the mother of cliffies, haha! Fucking love the story, Savage. Can't wait for the next one :)
    /CaraNo

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  3. AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH ( thats all you get till the next update its like my review cliffy)

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  4. Glad you've got your new site up. It's cozy here ;-) On the subscription list so I don't miss nothing. At least you won't have anyone fucking with you here LOL Like the new banner btw.

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  5. Oh no that's so cruel leaving us hanging like that! Lol thought it was going too smoothly still loving it though

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  6. I think this is first time i've left comment for this story, I have been following and reading for while but after all FFN drama (grrrr) felt I should just say love the new home and dont agree with it ever being taken down in first place.
    Anywayz:
    Ooooo that was evil ending! Looking forward to next update :)
    x

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  7. UGGGG! Where did Bella go? I hope nothing bad has happend to her. What a cliffee you have left us with. LOL.

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  8. I hoped that they killed everybody. What happened to Bella?! Ever since the doctor couldn't take the chip away, I was worried that someone would find her.

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  9. Crap! That's not good. Hopefully she's just wandered off to the restroom or something. Surely nobody has snatched her. Who could be left alive that's on top of things ebough to grab her? Hopefully the next post will find her safe and back with Edward. If not, we'll at leats get some idea of how strongly he feels for her now, right? He's going to go apeshit not knowing where she is and if she's safe. --Monique

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  10. gasp! Is Bella trying to get away?

    I like the color scheme of your new home, though I do think the gun in the banner needs a splash of red;)

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  11. Thanks for the evil cliffie.

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  12. OMG that's totally not fair....what a way to end a chapter...hurry up and write..LOL

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  13. NOT FAIR!!!!!!! Please update soon! Oh please!

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  14. Holy shit, dude! He should've carried her in a backpack like Chewie did Theepio in "Return of the Jedi"!

    I will be freaking the fuck out until we find out where Mrs. Doofy is and if she's all right!

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  15. I'm glad he didn't get shot and please tell me she just went to the bathroom or something like that. They have to get out of there like pronto. The less the guy at the door sees him, the less likely he can ID him - and Bella.

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  16. finally!!! sorry but you really had spoiled us... great chaptey as always... thanks

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  17. Yeah, why do I doubt she just wandered outside to see the sights? I hope he finds her soon.

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  18. Ahhhh! You are killing me here. This is way worse than the last one because I somehow doubted he wouldn't get away with it. She could be anywhere. Maybe she just had to pee but we don't know that LOL

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  19. I didn't get an alert but hoped update would be here!
    Yep door, this could be bad!

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  20. I think we all expected that Bella would not sit there like he said. But where did she go? I am anxious to find out!

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  21. try the bathroom first before you panky eddie boy. dont think she would of left him, hope he finds her soon, when do we get to the much need kiss and stuff, think they both need to get some!

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  22. Ha! Did she run or is she just in the bathroom? Maybe someone who knew her picked her up. Or maybe she figured she could contact her mom now that everyone is dead.

    Edward is going to flip his shit. I wonder if he needs to use Bella's chip to find her. That would require Rose's help and I doubt her willingness to help.

    This is really action packed, but I'm looking forward to the quiet moments that are sure to come.

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  23. I was wondering what had happened to your updates - I can't believe ff pulled this! I'm glad you are continuing to post on here though.

    Great updates - where has Bella gone? She always seems quite concerned with Edward's welfare; I didn't think she would run off. I look forward to your next chapter.

    EricsNo1Lover

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  24. I love it as always! *HUGE HUGS* I can't wait to find out what happened to Bella.

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  25. Great updates! I'm glad I found your story again. Oh know Bella where did you go? Thanks so much! Look forward to more.

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  26. If this chapter had a title...It should be called Evil Cliffie... Very appropriate.
    Grrr...

    Thank you for the evil cliffie :-)

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  27. Shit shit, double shit.

    I hope Bella wasn't kidnapped.. again. That girl has been thru some traumatic shit already.

    I love how fucking ruthless Doofy is;
    “I don’t have any allegiance…”
    I ended him before he could finish.

    TY for the UD!

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  28. Uh oh! Wonder where she ran off too?

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  29. AHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!
    I'm not thinking she left on her own though...

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  30. Oh god...I bet the idiot girl wen to find a fucking phone to call her parents. Which is going to somehow tip off the bad guys and they're going to have to rush to save her parents.

    And this is the reason I hate FF.net. Someone probably read the first paragraph of your story and reported it because they are stuck up assholes and then FF.net just pulled you without actually investigating. So irritating. And it's funny because there is pretty much no sex in the story. Why don't you post at The Writers Coffee Shop? Most people on ff.net seem to have accounts and post their stories over there too. TWCS doesn't have restrictions on what happens in the stories and wont pull down stories without investigating and talking to the author first. All the good smutty stories are over there.

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  31. Went to get a latte? Tampons? Slice of pineapple pizza?

    For crying out loud, Savage...

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  32. I knew it!!!!!!
    Either she went for a walk around the street (not likely) or someone was trailing them.
    Things should get a lot more interesting after this.
    Thanks for updating.

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  33. I think (hope) Bella had to go to he bathroom. She will come back and see him Freaking out.

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  34. Yes, Edward, this is VERY bad.

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  35. Where the hell is Bella?
    How can you do that to us? Why did you stop there?
    You're evil!

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  36. I must be sick. As frustrated as I am, I love the cliffies! You are a master ;)

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  37. Glad to have found you... Oh boy Edward this looks bad
    Rory

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  38. I thought that was really nice Edward offering to make things better for her on her/their wedding night. She is very young and impressionable... she might just fall for him yet. He can be very endearing at times.
    Rory

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  39. Damn!! Really getting your fix, eh? ;D LOL

    Very cinematic scene. Rather fitting "world" he lives in as a vampire character written human. Kinda like how that fits that he doesn't really get how "humans" operate, only underworld types.

    Thanks!!

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  40. Holy I'm About To Slap That Ho Batman! He told her not to leave!!!! And there were only 3 of them to kill? Cool! And I didn't get the alert for this one, but I got it for 51. So yay. Great work here darlin

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  41. Damn, I'm glad I get to read 51 now. Who would have taken her? Did someone see her and recognize her? Maybe they took her for insurance.

    Stephanie

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  42. Um......yes Edward.....Bella missing is bad!!!

    Keye

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  43. well, where the heck did she go. didn't think they left anyone alive so did she wander off by herself?
    tff000

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  44. Um, yeah, Edward. I think this is bad. Really bad. Or just typical Bella, does her own thing & is in potty

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  45. Wow! Doofusward's efficiency with killing leaves me dumbfounded!
    Now where the hell is Bella?

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  46. I knew she wouldn't be there! I hope she's gone to ladies room or something.

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  47. omfg!! wtf!! has she gone to the bathroom or has she been taken?!! hmmm btw is it so wrong that i think edward is soooo hot when he wields a gun and...uses it!! hmmm i suppose it is..but this is fanfiction right?!!lol!

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  48. oh boy not good where did she go? bella are you dumb or what you can't run now!!!

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  49. oh boy not good where did she go? bella are you dumb or what you can't run now!!!

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  50. I knew she wouldn't be there! I hope she's gone to ladies room or something.

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  51. Um......yes Edward.....Bella missing is bad!!!

    Keye

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  52. Went to get a latte? Tampons? Slice of pineapple pizza?

    For crying out loud, Savage...

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  53. Great updates! I'm glad I found your story again. Oh know Bella where did you go? Thanks so much! Look forward to more.

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  54. I was wondering what had happened to your updates - I can't believe ff pulled this! I'm glad you are continuing to post on here though.

    Great updates - where has Bella gone? She always seems quite concerned with Edward's welfare; I didn't think she would run off. I look forward to your next chapter.

    EricsNo1Lover

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  55. Ahhhh! You are killing me here. This is way worse than the last one because I somehow doubted he wouldn't get away with it. She could be anywhere. Maybe she just had to pee but we don't know that LOL

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  56. Holy shit, dude! He should've carried her in a backpack like Chewie did Theepio in "Return of the Jedi"!

    I will be freaking the fuck out until we find out where Mrs. Doofy is and if she's all right!

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  57. gasp! Is Bella trying to get away?

    I like the color scheme of your new home, though I do think the gun in the banner needs a splash of red;)

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  58. I think this is first time i've left comment for this story, I have been following and reading for while but after all FFN drama (grrrr) felt I should just say love the new home and dont agree with it ever being taken down in first place.
    Anywayz:
    Ooooo that was evil ending! Looking forward to next update :)
    x

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  59. Oh no that's so cruel leaving us hanging like that! Lol thought it was going too smoothly still loving it though

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  60. Glad you've got your new site up. It's cozy here ;-) On the subscription list so I don't miss nothing. At least you won't have anyone fucking with you here LOL Like the new banner btw.

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  61. Oh, dear did they know too much?! Had that guy heard?! He definitely wasn't expecting this.

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  62.  ohhh dear............where da fcuk did bells go??? hmphhhhhh, dis iz nt time 2 play hide n go seek Bells, #DoucheWard's tryna right his wrongs here. Hope she wasnt taken tho..........YES #DOUCHEWARD, DIS WAS DEF NT DA PLAN!!!!!!! I cant evn tink hw leavin her alone ina bar wud b da best of options tho?!?!?!?  i really hope she was jus a lil overwhelmed that she need 2 wash up in the ladies room a bit, LIKE REALLY BELLA,C'MONNNNNN

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  63. She's not there! Where's Bella, bathroom?

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  64. Oh no!!! Where is Bella??? 

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  65. Holy shit!!!! She better be in the ladies room! But why leave?!?!?! I think he should look for the nearest pay phone! :(

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  66. Oh fook!! Bad is a bit of an understatement!!

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  67. Loving this story so far. Definitely different than I thought it'd be a couple chapters in. I love the quick, short chapters b/c it really seems to enhance the action.

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  68. That's the meanest cliffie yet. But I can continue, so I suppose I won't hold it against you. Some one good has her right???? RIGHT!?!? ;)

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  69. SERIOUSLY???? Now that cliffie pulled me out of the lurking closet... I've been reading as fast as I could and just haven't taken the time to review cuz it's too good!!! But oh my gosh, she's gone????

    I've been waiting for UC to complete b/c I am not patient with WIP stories...then I saw the blinkie/review for Offside on RoseArcadia's blog and came over here and then found this great story, so here we are and now I think I'm gonna just have to start both UC and O after finishing this story!!! Great writing :)

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  70. Loving this story so far. Definitely different than I thought it'd be a couple chapters in. I love the quick, short chapters b/c it really seems to enhance the action.

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  71. Gah! I knew you where going to do that!

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  72. I knew it!!!!!! Was she taken or did she just go sightseeing?

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