Monday, May 9, 2011

CBWR? Chapter 77

Author's Notes:
I'm all sleepy, so I'm going to bed now. :)  Cya all tomorrow!
Shut up.

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Chapter 77:
Bella was so fucking gorgeous, I could barely breathe deep enough to keep my brain working.  She had stepped out of the salon – freshly facialed, massaged, manicured, and God knows what else – looking like sex on a stick, but without the stick.  I had a stick I was willing to share, and even managed to keep myself from saying so.  Actually, I didn’t say anything – back to the whole lack of oxygen thing.
They had dressed her in the salon, and the short little thing she was wearing had a collar around her neck, but no sleeves, and the skirt length was nearly illegal.  And it was bright fucking red. 
All I could do was stare at her.
Now that she sat across from me, running the edge of her finger around her water glass, I couldn’t even hear what she was saying.  I think she might have been talking about friends she knew in her school and what happened at the last homecoming football game or something like that, but I wasn’t sure, because I was having a mental conversation with my cock.
He was also staring at her.
Well, pointing, really.
I had to get a grip.
By the time dinner was over, Bella started asking me what was wrong, and why I wasn’t talking.  I finally just dropped my head in my hands and shook it, which didn’t illicit the correct response at all.  She really thought there was something wrong at that point.  Finally, I gave up, and just told her.
Well…sort of.  I didn’t tell her about my cock.  I’m not that stupid.
Shut up.
“You’re just…so fucking beautiful tonight,” I finally said.  “It actually makes it hard to concentrate on anything else.”
Her cheeks tried to turn a shade shy of her dress.  I leaned over the table and reached up to stroked her cheek with my thumb.
“You are,” I told her.
“Thank you,” she said softly.  “For all of this.  The spa was about the most relaxed I think I have felt in months, dinner has been wonderful, and you…well, you look kind of beautiful, too.”
I huffed through my nose.
“Guys aren’t supposed to be beautiful.”
“You are,” she insisted.  I decided it wasn’t worth discussing.
“Ready for a trip up the tower?” I asked.
“Definitely!”
Bella wanted to walk…fucking walk up the steps to the observation platform.   I thought she was nuts.  Once we had gone up about forty-five thousand steps, I was sure she was nuts.
“Seriously, Bella,” I panted as we reached another one of the platforms between sets of stairs.  “I can’t go anymore.”
I dropped down on my ass at the top of the stairs and held me hand over my chest.
“I’m too old for this shit,” I groaned.  Bella laughed, and whatever pain I was feeling in my calves dissipated with the sound.
“But I’m the one who is older today,” she said as she laughed again.
“Yeah – a whopping nineteen,” I grumbled.  “Ten years ago I probably could have walked up to the top, too.”
Bella looked down over the railing, biting down on her lip a bit.  She was damn cute when she did that.  Her eyes glanced over at me, but then looked back out over the city.  I hauled myself up and went to stand beside her.  The wind had picked up, and her hair was blowing out of the carefully constructed twists and braids and whatever.  Little strands were blowing around, and Bella reached up and pulled out some pins so her hair fell free around her neck and down her back.
I couldn’t let that slide without action, so I stood next to her and wrapped my arm around her shoulders.   We both looked out at the lights of the city for a minute, and I wondered what she could be thinking.  My free hand dived into my pocket, fingering the little box inside and wondering if now was as good a time as any.
“Bella?”
“Hmm?”  She didn’t turn towards me, but leaned against the rail and let the wind blow against her face.
“I…um…”  My finger fiddled over the tiny little bow on top of the box.  I took a deep breath and pulled it out.  “I got you a birthday present.”
“Edward, you didn’t have to do that.”  Bella pushed off the rail and turned to look at me.  “I think the whole spa thing and dinner and everything is plenty.”
Shit, had I screwed this up after all?  I thought there was supposed to be something to open on your birthday, and none of the other things could be wrapped.  I told her as much, and was glad when she conceded the point.  I held the little rectangular box out to her.
Bella’s eyes darted up to mine before she looked back down to her hands and slowly lifted the lid.
“Oh my God,” she whispered as she pulled the diamond and ruby bracelet from its box. 
“It matched your dress,” I said.  I couldn’t figure out if she liked it or not, and he more she didn’t say, the more I was starting to think I fucked it up again.  I should have gotten the sapphires, just because they cost more, but one that fit with what she was wearing made sense, or at least I thought it did.
Bella finally looked up to me.
“Edward…it’s beautiful.”
I stood there with the Paris wind blowing across my skin, the air cooling quickly as the setting sun finally disappeared over the horizon, and just looked at the most incredible person I had ever known as she looked back at me.  I couldn’t breathe right, swallow, or even think, really – I was just too caught up in the look in her eyes and the fact that she was here, with me.
I wanted to tell her how incredible she made me feel, and how I wanted to give her everything she could ever want in the world.  I wanted to tell her I would do anything – anything – to stay in her life when all this was over.  I wanted to tell her she had changed me – that I wasn’t the same person who had been so selfish and depraved he thought buying another person could solve all his problems.
I didn’t say anything.
Instead, I took the bracelet from her hand and fastened it around her wrist.

“Happy birthday,” I said with a little shrug and a grin.
Bella’s arms reached up around my neck and pulled me to her.  Her mouth warmed my lips as we stood there on one of the Eiffel Tower’s lower platforms, and became completely lost within each other.   There were no other tourists around, no other sights, no other sounds.  Only the two of us.
This had to be heaven, right?
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Chapter end notes:
“Facialed” is apparently not a word.  It should be.  If you can get massaged and manicured and such, you ought to be able to be facialed. 
Doofy done good, didn't Doofy?
Next update, tomorrow! 

93 comments:

  1. Second aww of the day for him. He is being so sweet. I'd say he done good.

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  2. Aww, so fucking sweet that I just wanna stuff him, and love him, and keep him in a tiny box, inside a drawer, next to my bed.

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  3. Facialed is a word in the Savage dictionary. I am almost positive it's there. Love the pic of the braclet. It helps with the story imagery to have things to 'see'... Doofus has come such a long way... wow..

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  4. i'm sure if you look up "facialed" in reference to pornography, you would find a definition... :oP

    Great chapter! Very sweet....I wonder how the birthday will end!?!

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  5. He did great!!!

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  6. LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL

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  7. Loved the chapter, he is doing so good.

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  8. Loved the chapter and I thought he did a great job. He is learning to keep his mouth shut.

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  9. She is Def not 19! Uh oh.....

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  10. Yes, he did very well! The bracelet is beautiful! Bella is happy! I am glad to see them both happy in a chapter! Buy him a BIG bag of scooby snacks! He can eat them all in one night!

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  11. Awww he's to cute. I wish he would have told her what he was feeling, but seriously why would doofy do that. le sigh. At least he's doing really good now. until next update :)

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  12. He did great! I am proud of doofusward...who knew he had it in him?

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  13. Yep
    Good doof. Scooby snacks for you baby!
    Feel sorry for him again in this chapter. He just needs to talk. He's right there... Finally using the right head and all.....

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  14. Awwww, he did reallly good. I love it that he's realizing how good she makes him feel, he really is too stinking innocently cute. I mean he actually told her what he was feeling at dinner, for him that's huge.

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  15. Oh Savage..... PERFECT!!!!! .... *sending to hubs.. so he can plan MY BDAY!!* lol... TY! - @MoniNP

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  16. OMG, Doofy done *real* good. Holy crap. Who in their right mind could resist that?

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  17. Doofy really did well. Yes he had changedm, but he's still a doofus cuz he just had a conversation with his cock LOL

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  18. aw! good job doofward! that is romanitc

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  19. Gorgeous. He did everything perfectly, bless him.

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  20. Way to go Doofus! I think I can call you Edward now! Thanks bb!

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  21. Wow ! I'm so proud of Doofy ! He can have a big scooby doo bag for this amazing birthday ;)

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  22. I ♥ it! I ♥ it! I ♥ it! I ♥ it!

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  23. omg he did exceptionally well!! how gorgeous and romantic and thoughtful and loving and caring of him!! he really is changing i'm so proud of him! excellent birthday!

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  24. Doofy done real good!!! He should be very proud! Today is Bella's birthday and needs to be all happy, so all those things that he wanted to tell her...he was right not to tell her today because that will be a really heavy conversation about how they can possibly remain in each other's lives. But tomorrow? Talking needs to be a priority! I hope? They are short on time!

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  25. I hope that Doofy tells Bella how he feels soon. She probably knows, but she needs to hear the words. This day was wonderful and I'm glad that he's starting to tell her the things that he's thinking and not keeping them inside. He got into a bit of trouble doing that earlier.

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  26. As far as I'm concerned, you can be facialed if you damn well want to be facialed. And yes, Edward did good!

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  27. Yeah savage, he done good. I just wish he HAD told her all that he was thinking, but he did good enough. Love the bracelet, just loved everything!!!

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  28. Aw he did perfect! I know I sound like a broken record, but it's just so sad that he expects himself to fuck up every other minute. I guess we're almost at the banner scene, right?

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  29. it was a great birthday. :)

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  30. Yes He did very good!!! Can't wait for more.

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  31. Awww...he did really well for someone who doesn't know a thing about romance...good job Edward...

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  32. I agree with facialed lol. This was a great chapter. He needs to let her know how he really feels about her. He gave her a great night!!!!!!

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  33. God I love Doofy ;)

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  34. awe good job doofy!! Me thinks he gets a scooby snack ,and maybe sex. (please?)

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  35. Thank-you so much for that. It was so beautiful... every part of it. The bracelet is beautiful too and matching her dress and the roses too makes sense to me too. I hope Edward tells Bella how he feels... soon. I wonder if she has any idea of how much he cares and that he would do anything for her. I hope he puts his jacket around her shoulders, I've got the shivers... for her, although his arms are warming her up. Oh and he is nine years older not ten, I hope. I wonder does Bella know his age? His statement was misleading even if he was joking. Every year means a lot at her age. I don't understand how she could be safe beyond a doubt in only a couple of days? I would think possibly never... or at least years, months seems risky and weeks seems fool hardy and days well what about Lee and the chip and the other guy stocking them? I so hope they get their wedding night and many more. Anyway, thanks for this.

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  36. I have to agree with Doofy, that moment has to be heaven. I wonder how long his good fortune will last?

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  37. so i just totally read this whole fic today! and i must say bravo! thanks @A_Charmie77

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  38. Sooooo sweet! I love it! hopefully the boy would get a present too?!?! ((please!!!))

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  39. I've wondered this before, but this chapter made me pause and ponder again... and I can't recall if you've answered this before... but is Bella the age that Edward thinks she is? Did she just turn 19? Or did she actually just turn 18? I've wondered a few times about her actual age since she wasn't the person they were casing and planning on taking in the first place and on looks alone they decided that she matched what they needed so they snatched her. If I find the time I might skim back through and see if her age is actually confirmed somewhere. It made me pause again tonight because I wasn't sure if her lip biting was in reference to their age difference, embarrassment, or because he said she'd just turned 19... or a combination of all three... or nothing to do with any of those things. Plus Edward has wondered (without question) why she was 18 and still in high school.

    Anyhow... enquiring minds want to know! ;)

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  40. *Happy sigh* I wish he would have said some of those things he was thinking after he gave her the bracelet. But maybe he still will later. I'm looking forward to the chapters to come, but I'm nervous that something will happen to him. He deserves a chance at happiness.

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  41. I am totally falling for Doofy!! I mean he has always been hysterically off and a lot of the times it is so sad that he just doesnt know, but now I want to take care of his big giant heart that is opening up for Bella!! I am so happy for him and I am so happy that Bella has had this affect on him!! I hope that he will be able to tell her those words that he thought so she knows just how he feels..even though I believe actions speak louder than words and he showed his feelings through very sweet actions...she still needs to hear those words!! Doofus you have done better than good.. you have done mondo fabulous!! I run not walk over to this site if I see you have posted anything on Twitter or in my email..Savage that last a lifetime

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  42. I can't call him "doof" ... he never had anyone to show him love.. how to love.. how to be in a relationship.. it's not his intelligence that's lacking, it's his knowledge.. he catches on quick... lovely gift

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  43. "facialed" is what the old Edward would want to do to her don't you think?
    This was seriously the best good Edward chapter yet. I hope he sticks with and doesn't revert to douche-man to much.

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  44. Good Doof, get 2 scooby snacks

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  45. Mater of fact, I think he's earned the right to be referred to as Edward now;D

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  46. yup, he did good. still wondering how they are going to make this work. feel bad for him because he doesn't know how to deal with all this - loving someone and needing them and how to act towards them

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  47. Oh shit, now I'm really scared. This is too good to not have something bad lurking around the corner.

    When he told her that she was so beautiful he couldn't concentrate on anything else, I melted in my seat. That compliment is extra special because Bella and I know that Doofus isn't one to sugar-coat or throw out unwarranted compliments. If he says it, that is what he is thinking. His lack of verbal filter usually gets him in trouble, but this time it was perfect.

    When he told her he "thought" you had to have something to unwrap on your birthday, it made my heart break all over again for poor Doofus. Because if you are not sure if you gets presents for your birthday, it means he sure as hell didn't get any.
    I think Bella realized that too and graciously accepted his gift.

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  48. awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww .. so cuteeee
    sooooooo cuuuuutttttteeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
    ii loveddddd ittt

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  49. Doofy has done very well. Lets hope he can keep it up.

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  50. Edward made Bella feel how special she is for him with everything he did. Kate's idea about the spa was great - Bella needed this relaxation. And they are in Paris - a wonderful city, where they are surrounded by beauty and can let go of their troubles for a while. I am happy that they are enjoying this special day so much.

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  51. He is recognizing the changes he has made because of her. Incredible.

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  52. This was beautiful, Savage! Can't wait to see Bella's reaction when Edward dares to speak his hidden thoughts....He is a changed man.


    The visual of them, embracing on that platform of the Eiffel Tower, is just breathtaking....yes, I can see why he thinks this has to be heaven.

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  53. Doofus is awesome. Please, please don't let him stuff the next part up :-) I will reiterate, Doofy could teach Mr AV a thing or two.

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  54. Yeah, we may need to find an alternate name for him. This love thing seems to agree with him. SO f'ing good!

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  55. sigh...i LOVE this story

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  56. Awwwww. I think I just awwwwed at both your stories today. He is a sweet doofus.

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  57. Very good Doofy, I'm sure Kate would be pleased if not a little green with envy. Loving the bracelet

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  58. Good??? He did amazingly excellent!!!!! Ifhe had only let his mind speak up there at the end.... What can I say? I'm a hopeless romantic. :)

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  59. This chapter had so much "awwww". I absolutely adore Edward right now. He is trying so hard. :)

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  60. Yes, I agree. "facialed" a verb: used for 'sat on his face'. Non?

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  61. Now this is a cliffie... Is she waiting til tomorrow to tell the truth about her age? Afraid to spoil her big night?

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  62. Oh Edward, you did good, but should have said a little of what was in your brain there.

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  63. I think facialed is a great word. He did great...with a little of Kate's help but what guy doesn't need help with shit like that...welll probably gay guys, but they do most things welll anyway except for not liking pu**y! haha

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  64. oh!!! well done doufus!!


    look, i'm greek and there was a movie a few years ago with the title Σ.Ε.Ξ. (S.E.X.) meaning Σούλα Έλα Ξανά (Soula Come [back] Again). Anyway, this woman, Soula, wanted to get married. In order to chose between the 4 guys she ever had a serious relationship with, she put them into tests. And at the end of the test she gave them points and whoever reaches "the" heart wins.


    my point is: Edward reached bella's heart, my heart and i bet most of your readers too....


    i cant wait for the night!!


    btw: in ffnet i'm milady d hiver :)

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  65. Aww he's doing remarkably well. Its scary!

    Keep. It. Up. Doofy. :)


    Tho, I have this foreboding feeling that when "the time" cums.. ehm comes.. we're gonna get cockblocked. I dunno... I hope I'm wrong. Usually am, so that comforts me. No cockblocking, 'kay?
    Thx! :)

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  66. LMFAO at "Finally, I gave up, and just told her. Well…sort of. I didn’t tell her about my cock. I’m not that stupid..... Shut up."

    Doofy is doing so well, please don't let him fuck it up! I know the fact he's got more money than Athina Onassis means he should be able to give Bella a romantic and special birthday, but we all know it takes more than money, and I think he may have finally earned a bit of a reward ..... #ifyouknowwhatI'msayingandIthinkyoudo

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  67. Oh, honey. Facialed means something very different from going to the spa.

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  68. he is so sweet!! you've come along way baby!!

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  69. Lyrics!
    “You’re just…so fucking beautiful tonight,” I finally said. “It actually makes it hard to concentrate on anything else.”
    And I smiled so widely when he gave her the gift.

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  70. Great job Edward. I can't even call you doofus or Eddie anymore.

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  71. Yes, he did good. Now if we can work a little on his communication skills! LOL!!!

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  72. He did do very well thus far. Certainly as close to swoon worthy as he has ever been so far.

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  73. You were on fire with the giggles about his... and his not so little (I'd imagine) friend's 'opinion' on her appearance and appeal at dinner. :D *mwha*


    This had me in stitches, "
    looking like sex on a stick, but
    without the stick. I had a stick I was willing to share, and even
    managed to keep myself from saying so." The"even" managing not to mention it was killed me. The next line was great too! lol"Pointing" BAHAHAHAHAHHAHAAA Yes, yes it was!! LOLOL Guess his little man doesn't know it's rude to point, but then when you're trying for it, is it really rude? ;) (and we KNOW she was trying. *mwha*)Yeah, he done good... even if he is a total whiner! lol Oh, well, we already knew he wasn't perfect. I'm loving her. And am so with you on "facialed". Hmph. There's even several definitions based on what's going on your face. *wicked grin*Thanks!!

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  74. Facialed is the past tense of a verb, but they don't perform that at salons... if you know what I mean.

    It was ten years ago when I actually did walk up the Eiffel  Tower and if feels like a million stairs!

    It's great that he's thinking of saying all those things he intends to do to stay with her. Now he just needs to actually say them. Feels like he's definitely getting closer, but I hope time doesn't run out on him.

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  75. Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww Eddieeeeee?!?!?!?!? The pic of dat bracelet is beautiful tho!!!!!!!!!! This is turning out perfect....knowing the side of Eddie dat we all want to just forget but cant *DoucheWard/DoofusWard or watevr other concontions we've made up for him in this story* Its truly scary furreal. Just for Bella's sake and i seemingly impossible future between these two love sick puppies.....i wish this nite wud continue as its been so far. I mean, they both deserve a lil break from LIFE ON DA RUN right?!?!?


    Eddie........ur not suprising me anymore. I know now wat ur capable of.....so GO 4 GOLD BABY!!!!!!!!!

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  76.  I thought the slang term facialed was used when (female) porn stars let the dude 'finish' on her face? No?  Did I make that up??

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  77. Yay Doofy! You've done so well. 

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  78. AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW, that's all I'll say.

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  79. Awww he did great! Although, he should tell her everything he said in his mind at the end.. She should know.. 

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  80. As i have said before he needs to man up and talk to her.  Very romantic evening though x I would definately put out lol!!

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  81. I hope they end up together by the end of this...  Savage done good by us fanfic obsessed people again...  Thanks Savage.

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  82. I like how you are opening Edward up gradually. And letting us hear the inner workings in his head, how Bella has changed him, what he wants, why he's doing what he is. 
    Loved how you included Edward adding his own personal touches to what he was told would be good birthday treatment. He owns this. And I'm proud of him. I hope you keep him growing, it's wonderful to watch.

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  83. Sweet, very sweet - he done good!!

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  84. Who said Bella was 18 to start and Edward never asked why she had another year of high school.

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  85. Now this is a cliffie... Is she waiting til tomorrow to tell the truth about her age? Afraid to spoil her big night?

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  86. I can't call him "doof" ... he never had anyone to show him love.. how to love.. how to be in a relationship.. it's not his intelligence that's lacking, it's his knowledge.. he catches on quick... lovely gift

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  87. Second aww of the day for him. He is being so sweet. I'd say he done good.

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  88. I keep getting this feeling that There is angst ahead. but maybe you wouldn't ruin such a perfect day...

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