tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post4870644686967319547..comments2023-06-01T08:41:48.682-07:00Comments on Could Be Worse, Right?: CBWR? Chapter 14Savagehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01540836633129138903noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post-47025628695167236502011-09-15T00:00:59.655-07:002011-09-15T00:00:59.655-07:00Came from fanfiction and unexpected circumstances,...Came from fanfiction and unexpected circumstances, Loved it. This is good too. Edgy and raw but good writing. A couple of hilarious typos, not all in this chapter, like bug guy instead of bad guy. Also, you switched from a past tense retelling of Edward's childhood to a present tense of getting what he wants when he probably got what he wanted. I am not an English teacher, and may be wrong, but I think the tenses got screwy a little in the previous chapter. But honestly, I am hanging on every word so I don't really care.......gabysuzannanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post-72147820333030125572011-08-05T23:58:17.056-07:002011-08-05T23:58:17.056-07:00Good job Bella I think your master is pleasedGood job Bella I think your master is pleasedBeckaboo924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post-85940779269672215622011-07-21T21:32:28.753-07:002011-07-21T21:32:28.753-07:00Yeah...Edward is kind of clueless about women. I w...Yeah...Edward is kind of clueless about women. I wonder if he will ever get her to talk? Enjoying.Marijee Chetnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post-19817194385077402022011-06-25T00:30:59.073-07:002011-06-25T00:30:59.073-07:00Oh, goody, another pervy mom.
Vinnie Barbarino was...Oh, goody, another pervy mom.<br />Vinnie Barbarino was hot.Linda Cullenboyznoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post-70484895899456300462011-06-23T16:11:59.465-07:002011-06-23T16:11:59.465-07:00Wow..she's very determined. Hope he shows his...Wow..she's very determined. Hope he shows his appreciation. As incapible of comprehension as he seems, I'm sure he can understand she has needs too., right? MidnightSun7noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post-2127254912178729312011-06-04T18:55:50.326-07:002011-06-04T18:55:50.326-07:00hot damn she sucked him off now i hope he does som...hot damn she sucked him off now i hope he does something for her too <br />i think this is goign to be a lot of work Gitika Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post-3811030403802196002011-05-24T00:44:25.071-07:002011-05-24T00:44:25.071-07:00Ugh...... I hope he does 'something' to re...Ugh...... I hope he does 'something' to reciprocate! LOL<br /><br />FanFicCrazyMeee611http://twitter.com/FanFicCrazynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post-18597937301458839032011-05-11T13:22:55.090-07:002011-05-11T13:22:55.090-07:00Oh, Edward. Well now what's he going to do? I&...Oh, Edward. Well now what's he going to do? I'm really interested to see where he's going to go with their relationship. It could go so many ways.Amy Fontainehttp://profiles.google.com/amy.m.fontainenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post-21450289579969008912011-05-01T06:27:53.110-07:002011-05-01T06:27:53.110-07:00Sleep, what's that? I'll have to wiki it.Sleep, what's that? I'll have to wiki it.SirenSongxnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post-30190157607617231582011-04-23T22:35:24.404-07:002011-04-23T22:35:24.404-07:00I so relate to your forgoing sleep for this stuff!...I so relate to your forgoing sleep for this stuff! I have sucking all my time into reading fan fic this week! It is after 1:30am already.Hoosier Ninanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-362386080697427086.post-27357525584970251802011-04-23T18:55:18.871-07:002011-04-23T18:55:18.871-07:00yup he did, and it seemed like quite a process. wo...yup he did, and it seemed like quite a process. wonder what it is going to be like when he actually tries to have sex with her - disaster in the waiting??<br />tff000Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com